33 of 65, and we’re just about halfway there!
Our protagonist is dragged back to the masters like a dead bird, and the masters are not impressed.
Prior to this editing pass, i recently rewrote this his scene. One of the things that flagged it to me was it was one that had quite a trope-y feeling about it. Disgraced/naughty hero goes before unforgiving tyrant/authority figure/council, etc. The original scene was just too much like a scene from a bad star wars movie, so i gave it a bit of spin. My main Protagonist is useful in that he could turn the most sombre of occasions into a redneck bar brawl, and yet he shows a rare shred of what might be decency, or might just be plain old pride. He certainly sees character 2 in a more sympathetic light through it. And so i hope to have turned a cliched sort of scene into an important, character building one.
- chapter 33 was a little too long, so split it, wrote it to a sort of Dan dan Daaahhh!!!-ish cliffhanger before carrying straight on with it in a second.
Keyword style impressions
- shame, exile, relegation
- Ominous bad guy
- blossom, silk and posture
- Foreign philistine
- comedy seppuku
- Orientation exercises: Getting duffed up